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mega godzilla
March 6th, 2006, 04:03 PM
Hi mg here before we begin there are a few things I want to say.

I would like to thank my friends Entrenal Mothra Mg 74 Gorjira 2000 Godzy Roadanguirus Cookson Godzilla and Showa godzilla .
I like to thank Entrenal Mothra and Mg 74 agian there storys inspiered me. So thanks agian. So prepare yourself for GODZILLA VS BARUGON.
Monster island 9.00 p.m

Godzilla rose from the sea it was time he headed back to monster island . When he went to see his good friends Gamera and King Kong he found them frozen . Then he was attacked . He turned to see his attacker it was Barugon.Godzilla used his atomic bla but Barugon jumped out of the way then barougon charged .his horn pirced godzillas skin .Godzilla roared in pain . Then barugon atacked with his rainbow ray the monster king roared in pain yet agian then barugon pulled his tounge out ice then came out godzilla was frozen in a seconds . Barugon roared in victory suddenly godzilla used his nucler pluse to breake free . Godzilla used his atomic blast agian when it barugon he roared in pain tthen he stuck out his tounge once agian but this is what godzila was waiting for he then ripped barougons tounge out . Barugon roared in pain then godzilla used his spiral ray wicth destroyed him . The End. Soory if its to short I am not good at writeing long storys and im sorry if it sucked.

Raptor
March 6th, 2006, 11:19 PM
Why does DEP's Godzilla vs Bad Writing (http://www.kaijuphile.com/forums/showthread.php?t=10355) series immediately come to mind? :dozing: Should this have initially been posted in the PREVIEWS or AT LEAST the LIT 101 forum instead of the Showcase?
Your attention is also directed to the Kaiju Writing Class (http://www.kaijuphile.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=130).

kritaya
March 7th, 2006, 07:07 AM
Godzilla and Barugon aren't the only ones roaring in pain. *headdesk*

Tokyo VigilanteX
March 7th, 2006, 07:16 PM
...

Wow. There is nothing there, that is a paragraph. Not a story. I don't know what to say, you've got the pool but no water. You got the structure of a story, but no filler.

superkaiju
March 14th, 2006, 07:21 PM
no offense dude but it seemed kinda cheesy. He hits him the roars in pain he fires his heat ray he roars in pain...too repetitive ya know

mega godzilla
March 25th, 2006, 07:41 PM
Look some one gave me five dollers to put thier story here and if I didnt I would have got beat up
I hated it to.

Tokyo VigilanteX
March 25th, 2006, 07:47 PM
Bullshit, mega godzilla.


Its yours. And you've started lying.

mega godzilla
March 25th, 2006, 07:52 PM
Everyone hates me !

Raptor
March 25th, 2006, 08:02 PM
Everyone hates me !Take it to the Kaijuphile Support Centre (http://www.kaijuphile.com/forums/showthread.php?t=1628). Then, give the guy his money back.