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Bruticus
March 21st, 2006, 09:15 PM
Here's the long-awaited short preview of the first chapter of PARKERUS, KING OF THE NORTH.

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Something about the shabbily-dressed man, with his sparse white hair scattered about his head, did not satisfy either Helena nor Parkerus’ logic. He was crouched down, cackling, not turning his head to look behind him even as their horse strode up behind him. The fiend appeared to be laughing, though the sound was inaudible behind the back of his right hand. His left hand was scratching angrily at the rain-slick concrete of the sidewalk, for reasons that my master could not surmise.

Silently, the writer bid Konan to stop, and the horse did so. Reaching to grab his small pocket knife, he asked the man, "Who are you?"

The wretch let out a long, sad moan in reply.

My master glanced back at Helena nervously before turning his attention back to the old man. "What’s the matter?"

"Please speak to us," Helena whispered quietly.

Abruptly the man’s body went stiff enough that, for a moment, Parkerus thought that he had been stunned by something. Cautiously, he climbed off of Konan’s back and, flipping up the blade of his knife, walked over to the wretch’s side.

The hobo’s body unstiffened after a moment, his frame sagging substantially. Somewhat relieved of his own anxiety by this, Parkerus felt himself relax also, but kept a tight grip on the knife in his hand.

"Are you all right?" he implored. Unaware of what he was doing, he leaned in to hear the man’s response.

The stranger whipped around so fast that Parkerus couldn’t react in time to avoid something - hand or weapon, he could not tell - slicing open his right cheek. The writer cried out and stumbled back, clutching the bloody cut with his left hand. He could hear Helena scream behind him as the poorly-dressed man rose to his feet and ran stiffly toward him, hand raised above his head like a scythe. Parkerus raised one foot and planted it into the fiend’s pale, saliva-drenched face, pushing him onto his back in the process. He looked on as the man flailed his arms wildly, screaming like an infant, and for a brief moment he felt pity.

Then he felt Helena tap on his shoulder, and he turned. She was pointing, wide-eyed, at the man’s right hand. Puzzled, he looked.

There were no visible fingers - just a single, bone-white, curved appendage like a scythe.

A number of thoughts flew through his mind right then, but he had no time to contemplate any of them as the hobo scrambled to his feet and charged again, blood foaming on his lips.

Void Skull
March 21st, 2006, 09:31 PM
It sounds familliar in a way, the "hobo" that is.

Tokyo VigilanteX
March 22nd, 2006, 01:52 PM
My master glanced back at Helena nervously before turning his attention back to the old man. "What’s the matter?"

This line confused me. First it starts with a 3rd person perspective, then it goes to what looks like a POV of Konan.



But good work Bruce. It had me wanting to read the rest, very nice.

Bruticus
March 22nd, 2006, 04:56 PM
This line confused me. First it starts with a 3rd person perspective, then it goes to what looks like a POV of Konan.

I'm not sure I understand what you mean. Nothing is told from the perspective of Konan, but another character who shall remain nameless for the time being. That's where the 'my master' stuff is coming from, at least. I decided to take a different POV from the traditional 3rd- or 1st-person - another detail inspired by Conan.

EDIT: Okay, I understand. It seems a bit jarring in the preview, yes, but in the actual chapter it's not nearly so.

I'm working a bit quicker than usual, so I'll drop another quick preview soon. I'm sure you've already surmised what happens to the Hobo from Hell, but if you want to remain in suspense, I suggest you skip the next part.

Raptor
March 26th, 2006, 03:37 PM
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA

naw dudez parkerus is teh shiot

it looks liek **** lolLet's see you do better, BOZO!

Zearatul
March 26th, 2006, 04:02 PM
The only possible reason anything this stupid could exist and not get banned, is as a promotional asset.
Tell me it's so.

Bruticus
March 26th, 2006, 04:05 PM
The only possible reason anything this stupid could exist and not get banned, is as a promotional asset.
Tell me it's so.

I hate to admit it, but Hellzilla seems to be doing some good in attracting attention to PARKERUS. However, that's not the real reason I'm keeping him around for now. He's only sticking around so I can crush his spirit first.

Zearatul
March 26th, 2006, 04:08 PM
Well... Good luck.
Make it productive, too, if you can, kk?