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Chapter 1:The First Attack

Out in the barren Pacific Ocean, a medium sized island slumbers. But within the island, the greatest evil ever known stirs, in the center of the island lays a castle. It's angels seemed inpossible, the entire castle seemed to defy all the logics of physics and impossible to build. But it was and within it holds the greatest magical force in the world. Deep within the castle a giant crystal egg is impedded in the wall, with many unreadable scriptures fill the surrounding walls.

Suddenly the egg cracks, light fills the dank, dark room and as soon as it appeared the light disappeared, leaving with it glowing red eyes.

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Japan, once the warring place of giant monsters of great power, but after the Space Godzilla incident kaiju attacks have declined. But Japan will be ready if any kaiju decides to visit.

Now the year is 2010, the moon is full and glistening, all seems peaceful and quiet. But suddenly all across Japan's graveyards limbs of the deceased burst from the ground and somehow fly toward Soporo. The limbs flew to the city and began to form into a human sized creature,soon the limbs formed a 50 meter human like creature.

The creature soon opened its eyes and unleashed a horrible scream, the beas ripped a nearby building right from the ground, and began to use it as a sword. It slashed, ripped, stabbed through the surrounding buildings, it throught another building through 10 building created many explosions. Soon the japanese army was called in, masers, newly made sonic-blasters, full-metal missiles, and regular missiles began to blast the creature furiously.

A huge explosion rocked the city as the beast's arms head, and torso was incenterated, but suddenly all the armies body parts ripped from their bodies reformed the beasts missing pieces.The beast roared in fury and soon the army was just an memory, as the beast soon continued it's destructive path through the city.

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Meanwhile at Infant Island, the legendary home of Mothra, guardian of Earth, the Elias talk of the impending evil.

"Moll do you sense it, its like tidal waves of magical power and evil washing all over me."

"I do Lora, I do, we need to send out Mothra out at once, before this evil destroys all life on this planet.

Lora nodded and they began the chant to awaken Mothra, several minutes passed and the Elias' chant ended. Suddenly Mothra's green eyes began to glow and then he waved his titantic wings, testing them. Ounce Mothra knew that everything was opperating properly, he flew through his opening to the to the world outside at amazing speeds, to meet the great evil's minion.

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The creature moved on towards Tokyo, and just like what happened in the other city the creature destroyed the army, and soon he kicked through some buildings and soon he stomped towards a middle school, smiling with sick pleasure, it knew that human children inhabited it, soon it ripped a pointy building from the building and was ready to hurl the building through the school, when beams of blue energy destroyed the building and it made the beast stumble.

The beast stared at the creature that dared defy him, but the only thing he saw was a blur, as Mothra knocked the undead beast backwards. Mothra slowed down and hovered near the rubble where the beast lay.Mothra then powered up his chest beam, when the beast lept up dodging the powerful beam and hurled a kick into Mothras's chest sending him across the city.

Then the beast lept up and was ready to slam down ont the bug, but suddenly many smaller moths burst out from the rubble and slamed into the beast creating a massive explosion.
Mothra landed expecting, when the dust cleared Mothra expected the beast to fall on the ground dead, but when the dust cleared he saw the beast reform itself by the use of human body parts.

Mothra seemed revulted by the ritual and roared in rage flew up in the air, unleashing his mana beam, which hit the city unleashing a blinding light,and when the light faded the city was in ruins what was left of it. Mothra then cried for what he had to do to destroy the beast, but Mothra didn't see the head of the beast fly toward it's neck, and when he saw it, it was too late as the head buried its teeth in his neck unleashing its poison.

Mothra unleashed a antenna beam destroying the head, but the damage had been done, soon Mothra whobbly flew off to his home.
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Chapter 2:The Army of Gillmen

It was around 12:00 at night the Japanese coast was beautiful as the waves gently brushed up against the shore. But that changed as thousands of lights appeared all over the beach.

A couple was walking across the beach staring at each with only true love when they saw the lights. Suddenly a manlike creature crawled out of the ocean, it looked at them, who standing there in total fear, and smiled showing razor edged yellow triangular teeth.

It walked towards them and they ran for their lives, but the creature jumped up high and landed in front of them. The man tried to defend themselves by picking up a large log that had floated along the beach, but with one slash of its claws the gillman cut the log into two.

Then infront of his girlfriend the gillman grabbed the boyfriend by the throat and lifted him up into the air and then using its tremendous strength ripped the neck off the body. Blood sprayed everywhere on the girlfriend, the sand, and the creature. The gillman then grabbed the girl by the hair, so she wouldn't escape and dragged her out to sea.

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General Topeana was a strict man with a great build, and dark brown eyes, the was so dark that it appeared black, and those eyes seem to stare into your very soul, and know if your lying or not.

The general was in high alert since the last kaiju attack, as how all of Japan's forces are. Topeana was sitting at his desk reviewing some kaiju combat battle tactics, when his sergeant appeared.

"What is it Sergeant", the general asked.

"Sir there are some strange things happening off the coast of Japan sir, there has many deaths in that area, and eye witnesses have claimed to see strange lights in the water." "But that not all sir our bioscanners have picked up a strange thousands upon thousands of fish/human bio masses in the area.

"I see," claimed the general," have a team their ASAP Sergeant."

"Yes sir", and the Sergeant left forfilling his orders. A few hours later and the Sergeant came back with a grim frown on his face.

" What is wrong Sergeant"? The Sergeant didn't answer; he just grabbed what seemed to be a carpet, until the sergeant unrolled it. It was the soldier’s uniforms that went to the coast, there was a letter on the fabric, but the lettering wasn't pen or marker, it was blood, the blood of the soldiers.

Tears fell down the the generals face as he found the soldiers dog tags, suddenly rage filled him, he wanted revenge and he would have it. He had all of his army move out, to the coast.
there he followed the directions on the letter and he had his army wait for there foes. But they didn't have to wait long as the creatures began to arrive. The soldiers were horrified by what they saw; human shaped creatures with huge claws, scaly bodies, a fish like head, and a fishlike set of gills.

The general(inside outside his tank) was the one who attacked first, firing the huge tank shell at the nearest gillman, blowing him to pieces. Soon the other soldiers began to do the same, gunmen then began to form their formations, but that did little good against the beasts as they ran forward ripping free the guns and arms from the humans, they went into the open sockets and ripped the human's chests off.

But then the cannon fire took them out blasting them to little pieces leaving nothing left. Soon the grenade and rocket launchers got to formation, and the soldiers opened fire creating many explosions. But the gillmen still kept on coming, some of the gillmen slashed the soldiers into two, others played tug of war with each other, using the humans as the rope. They tugged and tugged until the body broke, making a large pools of blood and internal organs as the creatures dropped them.

But then the more powerful machines came in maser cannons, tank, missile cars, and atomic blaster machines all came in and either melted or burned, or just vaporized the gillmen. But the gillmen were not stupid, some of them jumped on the machines and ripped into them and killed the controller, others just used their great strength to the machines into others, creating many other explosions.

General Topeana knew his side was losing so he prayed to the gods to send help, and started his tank up and blasted 20 gillmen with his tank, before he was overwhelmed. He then looked as all of his friends and peers fell to this demonic army brought forth from the pits of Hell.

He pleaded once more for help from the gods one last time, and help did come. suddenly fireballs rained down from the sky striking the gillmen instantly turning them into ash. After 5 minutes or so the army of gillmen was know more but piles of ash.Topeana looked around to see if anything caused the phenomenon he just witnessed. And there stood a figure cloaked in red with a large staff in his hand, he appeared to staring at something.

Topeana couldn't figure out what he could be staring at crawling from his tank, until two huge red eyes appeared in the sky.

"Mortals you may have defeated the minions I sent to you, but those were only suppose to weaken you and test you and against those treats." Now the real battle will begin, in one year my army shall arise and slaughter you all, be prepared to die. HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAH.

Then the eyes and voice vanished without a trace.
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Chapter 3ecidings

General Topeana shook with uncontrollable fear after the eyes disappeared. With great effort he turned to the mysterious man who was staring at the stars.

The general then mumbled," How will defeat such power and evil, I mean its eyes alone probably caused mass panic over the world."

"I do not know if we can or cannot defeat that entity, all I know is that it has disturbed the balance between good and evil." But right now we have other problems to solve, we need to defeat its army first before we deal with the entity itself."

"Right but how will we defeat the army, didn't you see the Gillmen and that monster that appeared a couple months ago?" "Even Mothra had a hard time defeating that thing," the general replied excitedly.

"We shall awaken acient and powerful beasts, then bind them to our will," the man stated.

"How will do that," the general questioned.

"With your help my friend, we'll gather a group of indivuals that will aid us in our task. But the monsters and this group will need a leader, and I believe you will be a fine one. So will you accept?"

"Will you know who these indivuals are and where they are?"

"Yes, I will know."

The General then regained his nerves, and said,"Then for the good of the world, I accept the leadership."

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After the his battle with the unknown monster, Mothra kept to herself not even letting the Elias in her quarters. The Elias started to get worried, they knew something was wrong with him the when he came back to Infant Island, but they did not know what was wrong.

Moll decided that something needed to be done, so she searched the whole island for her sister, so they can decide what action to take. She found her in the Library, looking over old books and scrolls.

Moll called over her sister to her and said,"Lora we need to talk to Mothra, he has not spoken to us in months."

"Yes Moll I totally agree with you but for some reason I'm almost scared to talk with her, he's changed Moll and not for the better.

Moll nodded,"But it needs to be done." So with those last words the Elias walked towards Mothra's quarters. They teleported in his room, and the Elias couldn't see anything. Suddenly glowing eyes appeared before him, and suddenly a powerful sucking force began to suck the Elias to the eyes.

Bit by bit the Elias' body parts began to tear away from the main body and flew towards the eyes. First the fingers ripped from the Elias' hands spraying blood all over the cave. Then the hands ripped from the their attachments, and soon cries of sorrow filled the cave. Blood sprayed everywhere, sickening cracks and ripping sounds overwhelmed the screams. Soon cries of whys and how could you, and mercy, almost made Mothra have pity for them, almost. Soon nothing of the Elias remained besides some clothes and pendent

Mothra then burst from innards of Infant Island and flew at his fastest speed, to a medium sized island. He then slowed down and flew towards the center of the island where a weird looking castle stood, he flew through the front gate to a dark throne room. When he got there two red eyes stared at him.

The creature with the red eyes then said," Welcome my General who seem to have enjoyed your transformation."

"I have sir and thank you."

The creature smiled showing carnivorous yellow teeth, for it knew that the first of his army has been created, and soon the rest of the army shall rise, and the world shall fall to his might.
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Chapter 4:The Journey Begins

Soon after the Topeana decided on what he was going to do, the mysterious man, formed a jeep from the various junk along the beach, with just a wave of his hands.

So they drove away from the battle field, and when they were 100 miles away from the beach the general asked," Who are you, exactly?"

After a moments hesitation the figure responded"I am the representive of the Wizard Council, because of my skill and alligance to neutrality, I have been sent here to restore balance to the universe."

"What, thats impossible theres no such thing of wizards."

The wizard smiled and said," after all you've seen thus far how do you know that is no such thing of wizards or magic in general."

"Alright you do have a point but even if you are a wwwizard, could I atleast see your face."

So without question he removed his hood to show his comrad a young face with flaming red hair, dark dark hair, and skinny face. Topeana was shocked for moment but soon gathered his wits and asked," How will we know the others that we need to find?"

"I shall know."

The general just nodded and said nothing.

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Meanwhile on a medium sized island, a great castle stood with an evil aura about it. Inside the great castle the entity that threatens the whole world stood, sitting on a great throne with his eyes glowing. Alongside him was his evil General the newly transformed Mothra.

Suddenly the entity's eyes glowed bright red,and Mothra asked," Master what is wrong?"

"a group is forming to defy me, they are first forming the rest of the group, then they will set out to awaken monsters to stand up to my army."

"So what will we have to do with them master," Mothra asked.

The Entity didn't reply, but turned to a glowing circle that just appeared and said," Arise, arise my Pumpkinhead."

A beam of light appeared from the circle and rose to the ceiling. suddenly two eyes appeared, and soon disappeared. Then laughing could be heared from every corridor in the castle.

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The wizard was studying his spell book while Topeana was driving when the wizard looked up at the air. For he knew that the enemy has sent out his hunter.
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Chapter 5:Government Doings

It has been a few months since the mysterious force told the Earth to be ready for war. It was broadcast throughout the world, but the broadcasts were really for the world leaders.

For it was the world leaders that the force was challenging, and the world leaders new they were being challenged as well. For they felt the same sensation as did the former world leaders did when World War I and II happened.

It was was around 4:00 PM Monday, when the world leaders arrived for UN meeting to discuss the meeting. Each world leader sat at their appointed places, and waited for the president of the United States to make the opening speech.

"My fellow world leaders," he said," we are facing a crisis so terrible that it makes the past Vietnam and world wars pale by comparison." "For as evidence shows, our enemy will not be using solders or machinery, but giant monsters."

Now the Prime Minister of Japan shall speak to us on how to deal with this matter, since his country has the most experience."

With that the president walked away from the microphone and walked off to his own appointed place. Then the prime minister walked toward the microphone, and began to speak.

" Thank you minister president," he stated, Now I believe everyone here knows of my countries history, correct. Everyone nodded.

"Good, very good, now to ensure that your countries are save I will be giving you plans and technology to create new military weaponry and the Garuda, MechaGodzilla, and M.O.G.U.E.R.A systems as well."

"Now I know that these seem old, but they are quite powerful, now my country will also be creating a cyborg, by using the parts of MechaGodzilla and moguera, plus with the cells of Space Godzilla, we will create Cyborg Godzilla.

Now once that we make sure that this new creation is save, we will give it to your respective countries to create.
"Also G-force will be traveling the world to instruct your repecitive militaries on how to use each system I will be given you."

Now my generals will also be having a meeting to discuss tactic for the coming war. And so gentlemen I hope that these gifts will aid you in the coming war, and I pray that it is enough. Soon everyone clapped and cheered at the end of the speech.

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Elsewhere, another was watching the meeting, with his trusted general always by his side.

"Humph", he said in contempt," they think those machines will save them against my might?

"Well master the human have been successful in the past with their weaponry, so I would not underestimate them."

" You are right of course my general but don't worry, I shall reconstruct my army, to deal with this new circumstance." "Soon my army grow, and it will be a matter of time before I squash all in my to glory, weather it be mortal or kiaju, all shall fall before me.

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Chapter 6:The sage, and the Beastmaster

Tanaka and the mysterious mage had been traveling for almost a week now. Tanaka was getting restless; he wanted to find out whom they needed to find and how they could be useful to him and the mage.

Tanaka was about to ask the mage his questions, when the mage said,"We are here!"

Tanaka looked around to see where they were; the mage had parked the car to a physic reading shop. The mage stepped out and Tanaka did too. They entered the shop and before the shopkeeper could even say hello, the mage placed his hand on her face.

Tanaka yelled,"Hey, hey what the hell are you doing to her."

The mage didn't reply, he instead began to speak in a spiderish togue, he was saying, "Sole ut ne at no sa, muke a nneatu hah!" The mage then released his hand and then and said," now you know all that we know, do you want to aid us, for without you we cannot succeed."

The fortuneteller was white and was trying to gain control of herself, before she spoke. She finally replied,"Iii don't know how I can be of help to you, I mean this shop is just a hoax, so I can make money."I don't have the gift you think I have.

The mage smiled and stated,"Ah, but you do have the gift ms. Olnehie, you have the same gift that your ancestor had, and do you know what his name was?" She shook her head no.
"Nostradamus" Her eyes grew wide with shock and unbelieve, the mage just smiled again and asked his question again.

She finally nodded and they departed to the jeep. Tanaka was totally confused, he needed answers. "Alright now what just happened," he questioned.

The mage sighed and said," the wizard council has told me that I need to find the descendent of Nostradamus and the king of Aldur, now without those two we shall fail." Now we need to go to Africa, so we can speak to the king."

"Now I know that we are still in China, so I shall transport us to the kingdom, but the enemy's forces will of course be honed to the tremendous magical fluz, that I will be creating." " But when we arrive in the kingdom of Aldur then we should be save."

So with those last words the wizard let loose his magic transporting the three humans to the Kingdom of Aldur. The was a great white glow and then the humans were gone and all there was a army jeep.

But what the group didn't know was those two ghostly eyes were watching them, and when the departed, Pumpkinhead did as well. But he disappeared in a puff of smoke.
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Chapter 7:The Hunter Strikes

Soon the group was transported to a wondrous garden with many animals wandering about. Flowers of plenty flourished, and the animals wandered about, acting as if the humans weren't there. Suddenly two huge men in black armor ran up to them carrying two spears.

One of the men pointed his spear at them all, making sure they didn't run off. The other man then asked,"What are you three doing here in the king's garden?"

Tanaka and Ms. Olnehie then looked towards the red robed wizard. The wizard just smiled and replied,"We are here to see the king on matters of grave importance. Now to prove my authentity, here.

The mage then handed a piece of parchment at the guard. The guard read all of the parchment, and then turned to the mage. "Hmm alright follow me." The guard then lead them through a door at the end of the guarden. The group was lead through the amazing castle, through its beautiful rooms, and chambers.

Until the ended up in great white chamber, with a long rug leading towards the door. A great throne sat in the middle, with guards on either side. On the walls great pictures of various battles filled the room like the last battle between Bulcifer and the Beastmaster, or the defeat of king Voden.

The group then towards the man that sat on the great throne. The man was a muscular man, the split image of King Dar. The king turned towards the group and asked,"Who is the leader of this group?" Tanaka was about to say himself but the red robed mage stopped him, he then talked to him for a minute.

The red robed mage then turned towards the king of Aldur, and answered,"I am not the leader great king Alar but I am the advisor to him, now I may look young but my father has trained me in these arts."

The king then began to study the young mage; it was awhile before he spoke. Finally the king said," You look familiar, who is your father."

"My father was Dr.Stephen Strange, The Earth's Sorcerer Supreme, and my name is Steven Strange," Steven answered. Yes I see it now you have your father's eyes Mr. Strange, now why have you come into my realm?

I believe this will answer all your questions, your majesty." Steven then handed him the parchment, after awhile the Alar sighed, and began to say he would join their group, when smoke to appear in the throne room, and from out the smoke a great claw appeared. Soon another, then legs began to appear, then the rest of the body appeared.

Pumpkinhead then roared into the sky, praising his lord and master. The demon assassin then turned towards the group, but before anyone could move or even think of anything. The Beastmaster grabbed a two-sided white staff, and jumped at the demon. Pumpkinhead smiled teleported away from the beastmaster, Beastmaster then looked around, searching for some smoke that would signal Pupkinhead's reappearance

Then from behind the beastmaster, Pumpkinhead charged the desendent of the last sula. But Alar was ready he twirled his staff and a great light was amitted from it, and when the light disapated a great sword was in the beastmaster's hands. The Beasmaster trusted the sword, trying to stab the demon Pumpkinhead. But the demon caught it just before the sword plugged into his chest.

But there was a price to this as the blade somehow burned the demon's hands, Pumpkinhead just growled and through the beastmaster into the wall. Pumpkinhead then hurled himself into the air raising his claws to slice the Beasmaster into nothing, when the Alar hurled his sword. The sword plunged through the beast. Pumpkinhead screamed in agonizing pain and the force of the sword made the demon twirl and slam into the ground.

Pumpkinhead was panting and before Alar could stand Pumpkinhead teleported away. The beastmaster painted heavily as he got up, and turned towards Steven Strange and said,"I will join you and I will see to it that this beast will join Bulcifer in the pit.
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Chapter 8:Creations

Deep within a secret facility somewhere in Japan, a great beast leaps almost dead and almost alive. The beast looked exactly like the infamous SpaceGodzilla who plagued Japan in 1994. But all kinds of cybernectic parts were all around the body, but these weren't no ordinary parts. These were the newly fixed parts of the MechaGodzilla and M.O.G.U.E.R.A systems. Cyborg Godzilla was the perfect creation of the Japanese government skillfully made by Dr. Saragame(this guy is the creator of Biolantte, I just probably spelled it wrong.). Though he wouldn't say he did this by choice , but never the less it stood right before everyone at the facility. The body was incased in a giant tube like structure with life sestaining liquid. Tubes were attached to some parts of the body to moniter Cyborg's condition. All around the facility very skilled skilled genetists and robotic experts roamed through the rooms and halls.

Some were writing in journals or clip boards, others were working in labs with chemicals or cells. Then there was even more who were working on other secret government projects that the higher ups had covering up for years. But with all of the great technology and knowledge these people pocess they have forgotten one thing, and that thing was that SpaceGodzilla's soul was in the cells that they worked on to create Cyborg Godzilla. So with SG's soul it doesn't matter what will happen it will use it's new found powers that were locked away in the deapest and darkest part of SG's cells for evil. But how would these mortals know of such things; they wouldn't. So without interfearence a new evil would arrive.

Suddenly unbenossed to the scientists working on their experiments particles floated down and were absorbed into the body of Cyborg Godzilla. These particles were affecting Cyborg Godzilla but this could not be shown on the outside for it was the inside that was being affected and what was being affected was the soul of CG. For the particles were actually the soul of Biolantte, wanting to stop this evil has flown to this facility to become one with powerful CG. The particles flew and flew through the very mind of the hybrid until the soul reached the very core. And unbenolst to the soul of SpaceGodzilla, Biolantte's particles formed into a rebilca of the body of Bio and began to pull the other soul to it. Slowly and surly the soul of the Godzilla of space was being sucked into Bio like the black hole that gave him live. After countless minutes the soul was absorbed into Biolantte and for the first and second time in both of their astral and physical lives both Biolantte and Space Godzilla felt hole.

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Deap within a dark cavern inside the massive dark castle the evil ones glowing eyes stared at his finally created army of kaiju. Probably the most easiest of ways to take over the world besides dragons. The most darkest of dark looked opon his beauties and smiling when he saw his general of hell,Mothra, that would lead his army to victory. He smiled just then showing dagger like yellow teeth. The king of evil knew that this day was the first step on a long road for him to destroy all of creation and shape it into his own vision, making him not just king but Torak(If you read David Edding's Belgariad and Mallorean series you know what I mean when I say this.) King/God of all the universe.

He then turned to his children and spoke some final words," Today my children we ride to glory, first this planet will fall to my might then the entire universe." Soon all will worship me as eternity, universe, life, death, I will be GOD." So ride forth and conquer so I can ALL." The beasts roared in glory to their master and marched through a tunnel to the upwards part of the castle. The gigantic drawbridge was lowered and the transfiguried creatures marched for the glory of the evil one.)
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<font color='#0000FF'>Chapter 9:The Summoning

All of the companions were in the Beastmaster's living quarters wondering what to do next. Finally Tanaka stood up and strolled to the red robed mage who was reading a spellbook, and asked,&quot;So Mr. Strange what pretell are we going to do now? Steven looked up from his spellbook and replied,&quot; Do not ask me my friend ask our friend ms. Olnehie over there, she will be the one who will tell you where to go. Tanaka nodded and walked over to Ms. Olnehie,&quot; Ms. Do you know what to do next? &quot;Well I do not know I mean that guy over there with the robes say I hold the same powers as the famed Nostramdomus but I just not sure.


But then just when she was about to speak again her eyes turned white, and her face was that of a person under hypnosis. &quot;Tanaka, you, Steven, the Beastmaster, and myself shall journey to the highest mountain in the world. There, there shall be a circle like that of Stone Henge. Have the Beastmaster go in the exact center of the circle and he shall be empowered. His abilities will travel all over the globe, all shall hear it, all shall know it as the Beastmaster's call. *But be warned The Hunter knows we want to journey there, *Beastmaster must be ready to fight this demon or all shall be lost.

Her turned to normal and she slumped to the floor, and Tanaka raced to her, *Steven Strange was smiling by the time he was helping her up.&quot;Well now my friends that takes care of that, now doesn't it? &quot;Now step two if you would follow me please.&quot; Strange said with a come, come jester, as raised from the room., with his sarcasticness following him al l the way. The rest of the group just sighed and followed the sarcastic wizard to the front court yard of the palace. When they got there they were amazed of what they saw, *it was circular, and filled with blue radiant energy.

&quot;This my friends is a portal, it can take us anywhere we want to go,&quot; he said with pried. All of them were amazed exempt for the beastmaster, he just nodded, for he had traveled to faraway places for meetings on portals. But something was bothering Alar and he knew what it was, he quickly got a guard to get him a piece of paper and his kingly seal, in just a few moments he was done with his letter, and nodded to his friends showing he was ready to proceed. *The portal was wide enough for the entire group *to go through, but suddenly Steven stopped them. &quot;Wait a moment my friends, Uun see not,&amp;#8221; Everyone's clothes glowed and turned in to extremely heavy jackets, everyone was puzzled for why the mage had done this but they knew it was for a reason. So they just shrugged it off. &amp;#8220;Okay now, now we are ready to go. They entered the portal and came out on top of the Himalayas mountains. Strange quickly cast a breathing spell for everyone so they could easily breath here and on the ground. Tanaka, Alar, and the red haired mage, scanned the surrounding area for Pumpkinhead.

When suddenly he striked, The Beastmaster yelled back saying he would take care of it. His staff that was on his shoulders in two seperent were already in his hands, and were connected to form on staff, that transformed into the famed Sword of Aldur. Alar charged the demon, *and the demon charged two. Both tried to slash each other with there weapons, one with claws the other with a sword. Both easily dodged the other's blows, until Pumpkinhead teleported in the back of the beastmaster and easily slid his sharp claws down his back, causing deep whip smacking pain and added upon that the pain a deep cut.

Pumpkinhead smiled at the pain he cause, but just then the Beastmaster surprised him, his sword slid across his face, causing much pain. The demon screamed in *pain as Alar screamed over to the mage. &quot;Strange is there any way of making sure this creature does not escape?&quot; Steven smiled and nodded. Strange dug up some things from the various pockets in his robes and drew a circle between him and the others, including the Beastmaster who had ran into the circle when the demon was disoriented, through some limb towards Pumpkinhead. He then began to chant some words and the limb began to pulse and glow.

It soon dug underground and then a huge demon arose from the ground, it had to be at least 40ft high. It rose its foot and stopped the stunned demon assassin. It stomped him and *stomped him until there was nothing left, it then turned into sand and sank into the ground. Strange turned the Beastmaster, It is time my friend.&quot; Alar nodded and stepped into the circle that was just across from them and stood in the center. Arcan marks began to glow then pulseate as the Beastmaster used his great powers. Every beast in the world heard his call, and he saw everything as well, he saw through the eyes of the army that the Evil One had created, and knew the creatures he needed to summon to fight these monsters....Kaiju.

He called out to every good aligned kaiju out there, from Godzilla to some unknown kaiju, they heard there Beastmaster calling them and they obeyed him, for they knew who was there friend who is the beloved of Yara and Curipiria, who saved countless animal and human lives. They knew all this and obeyed him, for what ever the size or power of the beast, all of them know that when ever there are animals in trouble, or evil lurking there shall all ways be a *Beastmaster.
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<font color='#0000FF'>Chapter 10:Conquest


Meanwhile the hideous army of the evil one flew, swam, or dug from there horrible birth place. Lead by the corrupted and insane General of the foul army Mothra. The army had made record time reaching the main land of California. They quickly rose from the water, came flying in like a air liner, or bursting from the ground like a guiser. All of the insect kaiju looked upon the country of North America and one could see saliva dripping from their mandibles in hunger for destruction and chaos.

Using his mental powers Mothra easlily found their first target and turned to his *soldiers, the very grunts of the monstrous army. He turned to them and spoke in a great voice that if any human would of heard he would drop to his knees ask what Mothra would like of him. And he said,&quot; Soldiers this your time, this shall be thou's first raid upon the mortal world. One of many, and when you march gallantly remember that our lord and master shall be watching, our Father shall be watching. And he will reward us will power and love if we do what he demands of us. So consider this when you go to the battlefield this day.&quot;

And with those inspiring words the soldiers opened their mantis like wings and flew to there destination. Then soon the others took to the clouds or began to walk towards their goal as well.

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It was around eight O'clock when the mantis like creatures arrived at their destination Sacramento California. The mantis creature were quick(you know the mantis kaiju from Son of Godzilla, I forget there names.) to the attack. Flying in they used there great claws to slice off the tops of buildings. The three creatures landed and began there terrible rampage. Their claws burst fromt their sockets attached to some green biocord, which they used as a rope to cut down or wrap around buildings. The kaiju also shot their claws like some demonic gun, bursting through buildings with blinding speed.

With there comrads watching there backs Sacramento was a burning hell, every where was burning rubble or mangled bodies charred or butchered. It was not a place for any creature including kaiju. It was a desolate wasteland of a place. But the creatures stayed in the city searching for lives that could destroyed and souls sent back to their master.
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<font color='#0000FF'>Chapter 11:The Arrival


All animals heard the Beastmaster's call but only six rose before it to challenge the evil that was threatening the world And these kaiju were The King of the Monsters himself, Godzilla. The Lord and Lady of the skies Radon and Rodan, the powerful dinosaur Bagan, the kaiju of micro-oxygen Destroyah, *and the Guardian of the Universe Gamera. It was these six who answered the call and it would be they to defeat this evil. They all gathered to where the Beastmaster was, and it was only he that kept the blood shed from happening. He turned to all them and spoke to them in there all their minds. &quot;My friends we face a crisis that threatens the very world or cosmos itself, now you may not care but your territories are also threatened. This evil must end and as you know I would never summon any animal to do my bidding, but I cannot defeat this evil alone and neither can my friends, so I ask you to help us.&quot;

Non of the kaiju spoke for awhile, and finally Godzilla spoke into Alar's mind. &quot;Beastmaster I've have known evil and world threatening things, I do not know not know about the others nor could I trust them in battle. But I will aid you in your battle. Then the others spoke out saying that they too would join in their cause. &quot;Thank you my friends I will always remember what you've done for us. Now my one of my friends shall send you there faster then any of you could possibly travel.&quot; (Talking now) Strange I believe its your turn now. The red robed mage nodded and stepped into the chamber, and took out a circular mirror from out of his robes and towards the monsters. He then began to chant the words to send them to *Sacramento and battle that awaited there. The mirror that was thrusted aside suddenly turned into a portal to the Canadian city, which all of the monsters stepped into and were transported there. Strange then stepped out of the chamber and turned to his friends and said only this,The Kaiju Wars have Begun.
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In the lab where Cyborg Godzilla was kept something strange happened, the great physic powers of Cyborg Godzilla sensed evil, a dark and powerful evil. So with a great mental shock the combined minds of Space Godzilla and Biolante awoke. He burst from incasement, turned on his thrusters and burst from the lab shocking everyone, he was heading for Sacramento and The War to End All Wars.
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<font color='#0000FF'>Chapter 12:The Kaiju Wars

The insect kaiju totally obliterated the city of Sacramento, there was nothing left, no skeletons of the building bodies of the people, ruins, forest life, nothing. Just a frozen type of desert, it was then the portal opened and the kaiju of the Beastmaster emerged. The male Rodan to on Megaguirus, the Female Ebirah and Shokilas, Godzilla and Gamera took on the Kamuracas, Destroyah took *on the back up unit The Alien(you know the warrior alien from Alien)plus Kumonga, and Bagan took on the Megalons. But strangely Mothra stayed out of the battle, perhaps planning something. But the War went on as it would ever would.


Radon and Megaguirus circled each other waiting for the others to make there move. And soon the wait was over as Megaguirus flew at great speeds and knocked Radon back. Then insect then attacked with her great claws, but the lord of the Skies dodged the blows. He then circled about and slammed into Megaguirus' head. Sending her down to the ground.


Rodan flew to the waters around Sacramento looking for her enemies.(Look I'm not sure if the city has waters around it so lets say the city created a river to draw energy from.)But from out of the water Shokilas emerged from the waters, wrapped itself around Rodan and with gravity fell into the water. But Rodan was stronger then the parasite burst from his grip and flew back into the air. Energy crackled around her horns and her Uranium Beam rippled forth. She blasted the waters again and again aiming to roast the two sea kaiju into a nice seafood dinner. But all she did get was Shokilas, who little armor was no match for the beam and the body of the parasite floated to the top. But there was on left Ebirah.

Godzilla and Gamera spread out searching and waiting for their enemies to show, and they didn't have to wait long. For two of the Kamaracus came down and rammed into the two reptiles. While the third fired many claws from his frontal appendices that it pierced Gamera's shell and Godzilla&amp;#8217;s skin. But the two reptiles wouldn't give up. Gamera unleashed his powerful plasma balls while Godzilla released his atomic beam. Both projectiles blasted into the third Kamaracus, sending it to the ground. But then ropes wrapped around the dinosaur and turtle and before they new what hit them, they were up in the air. The ropes that were attached to each Kamaracus were reeled back inside their arms. And the two Guardians dropped. But the soldiers of the evil entity forgot a few things. First Gamera's ability to fly and Godzilla powers, that even to this day baffle science. Soon both kaiju were on the ground and ready to fight again.

Destroyah looked around at his enemies, circling them, while trying to find their weaknesses. But the back-up unit and Kumonga would not wait. The spider kaiju sprayed his webbing at Destroyah. But a micro-oxygen beam took care of that real quick. But That was just a distraction as the back up unit was behind the 120 meter beast. He stabbed his tail blade into the soft back armor in the back of Destroyah. The pain was unbelievable yet the lord of micro-oxygen did not give up. He used his claw on the end of his tail to grip the tail of the back-up unit, and rip it out. Still holding the tail Destroyah discharged energy into the strange alien like kaiju. This went on for a couple minutes and when Destroyah looked back at the kaiju, it was a mess. Disgusted by its appearance, used his great strength in his tail to throw away the beast. But when he turned around Kumonga jumped at Destroyah, but at the last second Destroyah charged up his horn with energy and as Kumonga came in with its attack, Destroyah stabbed him with the powerful appendenge. A terrible scream of pain filled the area of war as Kumonga died the lord of oxygen allowed the body of Kumonga slide off his horn then wiped its disgusting blood onto the body. Destroyah then turned to face the backup unit.

Meanwhile Bagan faced the two most powerful figures in the army besides Mothra herself, the two Megalons. The megalons being not very bright attacked first, with their lightening attack. Which Bagan easily deflected with his shield. He then came in with a claw attack to the both of them, in such force that they flew a couple 100 meters before slamming on the ground. But other wise the Megalons were fine and in retaliation unleashed their napalm bombs. Which bombarded Bagan, fire, sand and many objects bombarded the hard carapace of Bagan. But he withstood it all, and in a great show of strength lifted himself into the air, and slammed into the two bug like creatures. Bagan then got up and created one of his diamond storm attacks, which blasted into the heavy hitters of the army. But when Bagan ended the storm, he was shocked there were only a few cuts and bruises here and there, but they were otherwise fine.

And so the battles raged between good and evil neither gaining nor losing a hand, but were rather equal in every thing.
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<font color='#0000FF'>Chapter 13:The Final Battle

Mothra watched the battles going on in the city of Sacramento, and as he looked at the battles being taken place. He shook his head, the battles were not in his or his lords favor. So it seems he would need to rely on his back up plan. Glowing a great greenish glow, spoke a languish undetectable by any of the other kaiju, exept for maybe Bagan. His eyes lit up and spoke in a more direct and powerful tone. The kaiju on his army also started to glow. It formed a kind of aura, then that aura turned into a beam that was sucked into Mothra. The beams were each kaiju's lifeforce, which was sucked into the general. Making him more powerful then had been before. He then turned the other kaiju and shouted. &quot;Kaiju I have watched the battles taken place today, and I have grown weary with it, so I decided to destroy you all then take over this planet for my master.&quot; But then a figure flew into view and landed in between the group of kaiju and Mothra. &quot;No Mothra, your fight is not with these kaiju, it is with the kaiju you accidentally spawned, a kaiju who should have never been created, and that kaiju is me.&quot; *&quot;Really?&quot; Mothra scoffed, &quot;Well then who are you now?&quot; &nbsp;&quot;I was once Space Godzilla, but now I am something more, a collective of the spawns of Godzilla. And I am confident that we as a whole can defeat you once and for all and end this madness.&quot; &quot;Really, well then let us put that to the test.&quot; Mothra then opened up his stinger and let loose a powerful beam went towards Cyborg Godzilla but using Space Godzilla's shield, he reflected it back towards Mothra. Which plowed into him and into the earth.

Meanwhile the other kaiju seeing how there battles had ended so abruptly, and seeing how the two powerful monsters were battling. They knew that their job in this was over. It was time for Cyborg Godzilla to end this war once and for all.

On the battle field, the battle was fairly even the two super beasts circled each other, trying to find some weakness, and waited to see who would strike first. And that person would be in fact, Warrior Mothra, he flew towards Cyborg Godzilla and blasted him with his prism blasts. But Cyborg Godzilla saw this attack, and created his shield absorbing the attack and sending it back towards the evil moth. But Mothra was a expert in aerial battle, and easily flew to the side, and with his sharp wings blasted into Cyborg's side. Godzilla quickly turned and threw a powerful Corona beam at Mothra. But the great moth saw the attack and tried to dodge it, but the Corona beam just kept on coming and blasted into Mothra, sending him to the ground. Then using his great physic powers to hold Mothra down as he told the other kaiju to put all of their energies into one blast. And as Mothra burst out of the hold all the kaiju unleashed their most powerful attacks and Cyborg also followed in this. The attacks blasted into the warrior moth, creating a massive explosion that engulfed many things surrounding the major city.

And thus like a starting forest fire, the threat of war of war is extinguished. For now.
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<font color='#0000FF'>Chapter 14:Epilogue

And so the Kaiju wars have ended, the kaiju have deported the city, weary and hungry for sleep from their many battles they had to endure. And the collection of Godzilla spawn known as Cyborg Godzilla also deported to a far off place were he would be until he would be needed again.

Now the Companions were back in the African continent when Strange stopped them and said. 'The War is over, we won.&quot; The group stopped and stared at him for awhile and then began to cheer and celebrate. For they had defeated one of the greatest evils one the planet.


Meanwhile back in the ruins off Sacramento, was the crater that Mothra created when he fell. Something stirs, a worm like creature crawled were what looked like the body of Mothra was and crawled into a dark waiting portal.



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And there it is, I hoped you enjoyed it, but please note that I intended to add more kaiju fighting to them then I did, but If I did that, then I would never get it done, for I wouldn't feel the effort to do it. So I set up a time limit and here you go. I may edit my story in the near future with some more fight scenes. But for now I am taking a well deserved break to focus on my other projects. But stay tuned for my next fic The Crystalline Menace. Coming this summer.
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Just felt like pointing out that you posted chapter 12 twice, and there is no chapter 13. &nbsp;
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<font color='#0000FF'>Um everybody I would like to tell everybody that the all the weird stuff you saw in the later chapters are gone. But because of my font color change their blue, so just thought you'll like to know.

Oh and another thing is that when I said coming soon I met getting started on writing it. Because The Crystalline Menace will take much more work then The Kaiju Wars to pull it all together. Oh and please read and give me comments either negative and or positive comments. Please tell me, so I can improve. Thank you.
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Hello Bagoth, as you requested I read the Kaiju Wars and have decided to leave my thoughts.
&nbsp; Something I noticed right away was typos and poor grammer. While they may seem small, a great number of them reflects poorly on the writer. Typos include &quot;unbenossed,&quot; for &quot;unbeknownst;&quot; &quot;pretell,&quot; for &quot;praytell;&quot; amd &quot;countries,&quot; instead of &quot;country's.&quot; It is a good idea to use spellcheck or a good dictionary to write a word correctly. Even with that done, always doublecheck. Computers are fast not smart; if you correctly spell the wrong word, the computer won't tell you you've made a mistake.
&nbsp; In that vein, grammer and story telling could have also been better. It starts out well at first but at times it is bit choppy. It moves too quickly without enough transition.
&nbsp; I must also comment on the non-Godzilla characters. We see Dr. Strange, the Beastmaster and a Sigourney Weaver Alien. We can safely assume that as Dr. Strange is sorrcerrer supreme, you are thinking of Marvel Comics' Dr Strange. Beastmaster seems derived from the television and movie character. The alien is said to from the film &quot;Aliens.&quot; They seem rather far removed from kaiju eiga and I found them slightly jarring.
&nbsp; As for the kaiju shown I must speak of them as well. The mantis monster who's name you did not know is &quot;Kamakuras.&quot; It is derived from the Japanese word for mantis. If you see the dubbed version, you may hear his dubb name of Gimantis.
&nbsp; I am rather pleased with the usage of both Radon and Rodan; it was touching to see these two mates described as Lord and Lady and it was a clever way of using both names.
&nbsp; As for Ebirah, he (or she) is not an insect monster. Ebirah is seemingly derived from a shrimp or a lobster.
&nbsp; As for Bagan, he is not a dinosaur. According to Toho Kingdom, there were in fact two Bagans. The first was an amalgamtion of three lesser monsters, the water-god-beast, the ape-god-beast, and the dragon-god-beast. The second better known Bagan was a Chinese dragon that slept in the Himilayas. (Either Himilayas or Himilaya Mountains, not a mixture as was used in the story.) This Bagan was awakened by global warming and, as an eco-terrorist, sought to destroy the polluting humans. (This was seen in Battra as the abandoned film influenced Godzilla and Mothra: The Battle for Earth.) Another Bagan was seen in the Godzilla video game, &quot;Super Godzilla.&quot; There he was also a Chinese dragon but he recieved great power when the aliens that awoke him combined his DNA with that of King Ghidorah and Godzilla.
&nbsp; Aside from his parentage, I find it difficult to think of Bagan, and Destoroyah, as being allied on the side of good. (Koujomatsu be damned, I am not thinking of that one in writing this.) Both are often portrayed as evil. If, however, it could be said that Bagan and Destoroyah teamed up with the good monsters for the sake of survival, it could work. This is seen in how the Soviet Union joined the Allies in WWII. (Which is spoken of in this story.) Joseph Stalin was a harsh and cruel man, that many agree upon. However, the devestation that Hitler wrought against Mother Russia was so horrible that he joined up with the Allies, who were good, against the Axis, who were bad, for no other reason than that he wanted to live.
&nbsp; As for Sacremento, it is near a real river, two in fact. In reviewing my encyclopedias when I read what you said, I learned that Sacremento is bordered by the America and Sacremento rivers. In that, I am slightly dissapointed. If the battle were to fought there, you could have done some research on the city. If you don't have an encyclopedia, just check on line. In writing Monster Wars, whenever I write about a particular place, I do a little bit of research to know what I should say. Just recently I checked out books on Hawaii from the library because I plan for a monster battle to fought there.
&nbsp; Also on that note is how you told us that you didn't know if the city was near water. Other times you also stop in mid-story address the reader in an aside. Such a chatty tone and self-doubt leads the reader to doubt your credibility. Though such asides are fine for comedic intent, I sense that you are trying to write a serious story.
&nbsp; However, this is not to say that the story is bad; it has potential. I like the battle of good vs. evil and the high stakes add to the drama. Though a better resolution could be offered as to see what happened to the chief villain or the general who was suposed to lead the good monsters, it was still good. I also like &quot;Cyber-Godzilla.&quot; That monster was interesting and proved an intergral part of the story.
&nbsp; The story is alright and it has the chance to become great.
&nbsp; Until next time, Bagoth. &nbsp;
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<font color='#0000FF'>I thank you for your comments Obi, they are greatly apreciated. I shall need to focus on my spelling better in my next book, though in the beginning I just typed up the story on the roost and not on the roost. Though I would also like to point out that if you ever had read the Dragonlance or Forgotten Realms series, these stories are greatly affected by those. So alot of the stuff that could happen there could happen here. And my strange is the son of Dr. Strange not Dr. Strange himself. On another note the demon that was hunting the group for so long, was actually Pumpkinhead from the Pumpkinhead series.

But I am glad that you enjoyed the way I used Rodan and Radon, and my Cyborg Godzilla. Oh and please note that my showings of Destroyah and Bagan were important because the were needed in the battle.

But anyways thankyou for telling me all of that Obi-juan, I shall work on my spelling and cofidence and write my fic to the best of my ability. So I thank you.
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<font color='#0000FF'>And guys, if your waiting for the my next part in my series to come out, spend your time reading some of my redoes and new monster stats I've made.
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I will say that Bagoth is a very creative storyteller but this one
NEEDS WORK!!!
See the KAIJU WRITING CLASS Forum and particularly, the PLOT HOLE topic as to why this little "note" is here. It's not an attempt to put anyone's writing efforts down but a concentrated effort to have even BETTER kaiju fiction on the forum.
Many "errors" can easily be corrected, rewriting of sections and relationships as necessary and the results will be well worth it!
The most obvious benefit of a little "touch up" is getting the story moved to the SHOWCASE. From there, maybe even the KP main site that Sauron dedicated to fan works. A little more work could go a long way, especially on the older tales that were moved to this server. The formatting got a little messed up...!
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